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Excerpt from the Azzgorragead - Dînadan - 07-18-2016 09:07 AM

"...And as I descended through the Gates of Death before me lay a vast wasteland, a blasted desert haunted by the souls of the damned where the spirits of traitors and oathbreakers are staked out to be preyed upon by Hashut's forsaken spawn each night. For twelve days and twelve nights I traveled through that forsaken land before arriving at the crest of the Pit, the dark abyss where all must go.

Looking down I saw that Twelve levels there are to the Pit, one each for every level of society. The first and highest is the most populous and is where the souls of slaves go, shackled in death as they were in life, lorded over by shadowy bull-headed Daemons who whip them ceaselessly. Below that is the second level, reserved for the honoured slaves, those whose chains, both mortal and eternal, are invisible to their eyes. Next lies the third level, for the common Dawi Zharr, who are most numerous, dwelling in simple homes of stone and below that is the fourth for the Mothers, the matrons of the families honoured in death for bearing the Children of Hashut and the fifth for the Fathers, masters of the hearth and sires of all. Grander are the homes in these levels, the whims of those that dwell there catered for by Daemon thralls bound to their wills.

Below that the shadows were too dark to discern their inhabitants and so I descended into the Pit. Down I went, through the sixth where the Overlords dwell in their obsidian palaces, past the seventh where the Bull Centaurs revel in their debauchery and the eighth where the priests chant in their temples. Deeper still I went, beyond the ninth where the heroes reside, training without pause for the glories they shall reap in the End Times and beyond the tenth where the Prophets speak the word of Hashut from golden thrones atop black marble ziggurats, and so I arrived at the eleventh, the Court of the High-Priests. No further could I go, for no mortal may set foot in the twelfth,  the deepest where sits Hashut Himself on His throne, brooding and biding His time..."

- Excerpt from The Azgorragead, an epic tale by the priest Azgorrag detailing his journey to the afterlife to reclaim the soul of his family after a curse of madness cast on him by Tzeentch drove him to slay them. The validity of the tale is much debated, and the place where Azgorrag says he found the Gates of Death which allow the living to enter the realm of death is highly contested amongst Dawi Zharr scholars.

RE: Excerpt from the Azzgorragead - Ikkred Pyrhelm - 07-18-2016 09:53 AM

One of my favourites and votes in the end. Really enjoyed the Greek style mythology spin with the story. Pacing felt perfect and that ending of the deepest level was great. Steller stuff! Happy

RE: Excerpt from the Azzgorragead - Dînadan - 07-18-2016 10:28 AM

Thanks Ikkred Takes Hat off

RE: Excerpt from the Azzgorragead - Carcearion - 07-18-2016 01:16 PM

The divine comedy is hands down my favorite classical work and I loved reading this entry. You even managed to pull out a great level of weirdness that made the piece really work.  

Congratulation  Takes Hat off

RE: Excerpt from the Azzgorragead - Dînadan - 07-18-2016 02:17 PM

Thanks Carcearion, hardest part was coming up for something for each level to make each unique.

RE: Excerpt from the Azzgorragead - Admiral - 07-18-2016 03:31 PM

Yep, great piece and a worthy medal-claimant!

RE: Excerpt from the Azzgorragead - Jackswift - 07-21-2016 11:35 AM

Well laid out, and a great style to use for the entry.  One of the best entries fitting to the theme!  Cheers!

RE: Excerpt from the Azzgorragead - Dînadan - 07-21-2016 03:06 PM

Thanks Jackswift