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Shovel CoalAdmiral 07-30-2016

Shovel Coal

"The bull aflame,
threw the merwyrm out far,
and branded her for harlotry.
In sea she crashed, in sea she remains,
in wait to swallow us whole.

Wey woe, clear an' spit,
boil it, broil it dry.
Shovel coal, as hull gives in,
in rush of sea we die.

Some the gods made fine, yet others foul,
and scum to steam on the sea.
With iron 'round throat,
and drowning agape,
we toil 'neath whip and blade.

Wey woe, curs'd water,
boil it, broil it dry.
Shovel coal, as hull gives in,
in rush of sea we die.

Twain moons has coupled,
and warned us starkly,
turn 'round for port at once.
Yet here we roam, the seas astorm,
as her maw close all around.

Wey woe, curs'd water,
boil it, broil it dry.
Shovel coal, as hull gives in,
in rush of sea we die.

Flames hiss, steam scalds,
cast head o'er heel,
decks groan as rivets pop.
Shriek of metal, wound torn through plates,
ableed the depths claim our souls.

Wey woe, curs'd water,
boil it, broil it dry.
Shovel coal, as hull gives in,
in rush of sea we die.

The bull aflame,
threw the merwyrm out far,
and branded her for harlotry.
In sea she crashed, in sea she remains,
in wait to swallow us whole."

- Chaos Dwarf sailor's song


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RE: Shovel CoalJackswift 07-31-2016

Brilliant Admiral.  The chorus is remarkably simple in style, yet flows beautifully, and has the catch of an earwyrm that any good sailor song should have.  An essential repetition that ties the rest of the song together.  

The structure of the verse is inversely complex.  At an initial read through it felt like the structure of each verse varied slightly... Which required a few more reads to get the right feel and realize that it well maintains the flow.  The piece got better with each successive read through.

You can hear cruel gruff  voices calling the song out as they bend their backs and toil across the seas...

Wey woe, curs'd water,
boil it, broil it dry.
Shovel coal, as hull gives in,
in rush of sea we die.

Chilling.. !  Well done. Takes Hat offCheers!

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RE: Shovel CoalAdmiral 07-31-2016

Thank you kindly, Jackswift! The words were mine, though admittedly I can't achieve the complex rythm and structure on my own as is evident in the simpler and clumsier structured songs invented from scratch by me.

The best compliment is imitation, and indeed the underlying structure of the song (including its changing rythm through the verses) is directly stolen from Hans Zimmer's Hoist the Colours (lyrics) from Pirates of the Caribbean: At World's End, which by the way was a hardcore opening of a Disney movie if ever there was one.

Now we need a deep and gruff voice singin' it in audio...


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RE: Shovel CoalAbecedar 07-31-2016

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RE: Shovel CoalFuggit Khan 08-03-2016

Another great bit of background material (in a long list of incredible submissions) from you Admiral. I love it, and the first thing that came to my mind was Chaos Dwarf pirates, akin to Pirates of the Caribbean.
I like that your stories quite often feature a mention of rivets and/or bolts. What makes that so cool is that no mighty structure or war machine of engineering can be accomplished without the humble rivet/bolt. Such things are the foundation of metal working and machines...perfect for Dawi Zharr fluff, as they admire such metal working skills.


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RE: Shovel CoalCarcearion 08-03-2016

Another fun piece of work!

If you sing the chorus aloud a few times its really quite catchy

...shovel coal, as hull gives in, in rush of sea we die. Cheers!


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RE: Shovel CoalAdmiral 08-19-2016

Yarr! Thank you kindly, folks! Cheers!


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